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Rain Dancer by ^budgie:iconbudgie:

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Rain Dancer

So many things to do
But I can’t concentrate tonight
Somehow I can’t convince myself
That everything will be all right
I don’t think I’ll be ok
And all my friends seem to know
But the only one here to call on me
Is the rain, rapping on my window

And through the rippling glass
Again, I sit and stare
Down the empty city streets
And sure enough, she’s there
In pigtails and pink ribbons
Ignorant of her age
Dancing for her unseen audience
Upon the asphalt stage

Tell me little figurant
How to dance beside my dreams
How to hear laughter though my tears
Teach me nothing’s as it seems
And make me believe it,
Beautiful rain dancer
Let me spend some time with you
Tell me why I act this way
And do the things I do

Then teach me how to be like you

Little ballerina
Teach me to dance in the rain
Tie ribbons in my hair
And let me be like you again

       Free me from my pragmatic chain
©2006-2009 ^budgie
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Author's Comments

This poem is at least 2 years old now, but that's ok. I'm leaving now, I'm not really sure when I'll be back. So far I've given all my old watchers a little something but my poetry friends. So here's one of the first poems I ever posted on DA back on my old account. It's not long, but I hope you enjoy it now as much as you did two years ago.

I've discouraged critique this time. I've had this piece critiqued over and over and over and over and this time I'd just like it to be. Take it for what it is or leave it alone.

- Got the image off a stock site some time ago, can't remember exactly where, if you happen to know let me know please :3

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~hallistorkx3 Sep 3, 2006, 11:03:54 PM
beautiful work :)

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it's six am and ice cream is the first thing on my list.
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~Rizn-F Sep 4, 2006, 1:59:48 AM
Great story telling in a pleasant way. The phrases work rythmic and invite you to keep reading. I hope you'll be back soon and be inspired and incouraged to create art like this again.

I wish you the best of luck surching for that raindancer. :)

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I keep on struggeling, keep up the fight,
I keep on walking through the night,
Soon dawn will come and the day will strike,
I know that what I fight for is alright...
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~mabo-chan Sep 4, 2006, 2:45:43 AM
:( whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!?
:iconbudgie:
^budgie Sep 4, 2006, 2:57:59 AM
?

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^budgie | Stephan
anime/manga gallery director
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~PC-Ninja Sep 4, 2006, 5:19:16 AM
I like it. We'll miss you and I'll be sad not seeing updates from you in my devwatch.
(however, I dont see an image, just so you know)

Have fun where ever you're going and don't leave us for too long =^.^=

>>Sukito-chan

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New account: :iconSmoteyMote:

Please visit me there!
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~enduro Sep 4, 2006, 5:31:11 AM
Usually I don't read the literature submissions, but that last stanza really caught me unaware. It's so...desperately wanting. *A*

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You're goin', goin', gone.
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~RinBloodwrath Sep 4, 2006, 5:54:18 AM
I love it~ :heart:

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:iconorphan2plz:
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~EvaLilith Sep 4, 2006, 6:43:39 AM
What a great image... it's awesome!

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"Bloom, close, kick 'im in the head. Bloom, close, kick 'im in the head." - A "Due South" swimming lesson

"Build a man a fire, and he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life." from Jingo by Terry Pratchett
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~daghrgenzen Sep 4, 2006, 7:06:16 AM
Woah I didn't know you write this well. =) That's really cool. ^^ And umm it seems my computer/Internet connection/something doesn't show the preview images of poems. <_<

:+fav:

--
Kit, "How about your love life?"
Steve, "That should occupy all of ten seconds. My love life is like the Loch Ness Monster - rumours of its existence are greatly exaggerated."
-Killing the Shadows, Val McDermid.
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~Kirohaku Sep 4, 2006, 8:55:01 AM
Very nice poem! The rhyming is very smooth and doesn't seem forced. And the last line really ties the whole thing together. :)

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One cannot say they hate sushi, unless one has tried EVERY type of sushi that exists... that's a lot of sushi...
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