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In your eyes
       One more time
Let me see...
The little rose tinted reflection
That you've created of me...

Can you see past him?
                          The little man in your eyes?
Standing between you and me
And concealing all my lies...

I want to be him,

I want to be what you see

I want to never disappoint you
With what I really turned out to be...


Don't blink,
                    Don't blink...
This,  this here,     this now     this is fine...
This refection that you cast...
  I can pretend it's mine...

A little longer.

Don't blink...
©2008-2009 ^budgie
:iconbudgie:

Author's Comments

We are all liars.

2004. Was requested I re-submit some of my older wrtings from my old account. Even though they are old, and you probably don't watch me for my writing, I hope you like it just the same.

Preview maniped from bionic-stock :heart:

More Writings: [link]

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:iconmalandante:
Omg.. that is awesome. Really well done. :D
:iconryante:
An interesting poem. I like how the lines have a semblance of movement, which is stimulating for the reader. The language is rather simple, but that's a good thing here.

Only real suggestion: change "you're" in the first line to "your". As of now it's grammatically incorrect.

Also, you've mentioned in previous works and journals that you're working on a story or novel? Will you ever post that anywhere, because if so, I would be very interested in reading it.
:iconbudgie:
I've got some other things in my gallery, poems and short stories (literature section of my gallery). I used to post some of the longer stories and novel series' that I was working on, but then people started stealing them and posting them around the internet, so I took them down.

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^budgie | Stephan
anime/manga gallery director
:iconboya-monkae:
awwwww~

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If my picture is fat you'd call me a fatty

If my picture is skinny you'd call me a skinny

Yet if my picture is swirled you'd say i photoshopped it :O
:iconryante:
Ouch. That's pretty nasty. How did you find out? Google or something?

Well, that's why I never post any of my writing I really care about. Everything in my gallery is considered "expendable", though I'd certainly be pissed if anyone had the gall to steal a piece.
:iconbooyakana777:
brilliant

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And the days fly by with no mercy...
:iconnewborn-butterfly:
I think that your writing is beautiful, and while I admit I do neglect my love of literature a little because visual works are much quicker to deal with, things like this are certainly worth the time it takes to read them and think about them :clap: definitley keep 'em coming

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:iconryoun-atsumi:
This is... so eloquently put that which I strive to every day. For friends, for family, I strive to pretend I am what they see me as. I fear the day they blink and actually see me.
:heart: Just love, because you've pretty much explained in words this feeling I haven't been able to name. And for that you have my gratitude (So that I might get others to understand by showing them this work) and my awe; I've never much had a way with words.

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"I didn't do it, nobody saw me! You can't prove it, Katie is lying!" -Me.
I'm a child cleverly disguised as an adult :giggle:

Laugh like there's no-one watching; it helps keep the kiddies off your lawn
:iconblackroseakn:
Awesome work. Very interesting.
:iconseraphyne:
Sometimes others just say what you want to say better than you could ever.

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:damphyr: Seraphyne

Life is a spiral of misery that is shot through with brief glimpses of happiness. Your mission in Life is to hold on to those glimpses of happiness as long as you can. Not everyone succeeds...

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